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I really don't have an idea how to write it on another way, can it be simply, About the songs lyrics Rihanna explained, or Rihanna explained the songs lyrics stating? Tomica1111 ( talk) 13:53, 27 July 2011 (UTC) Give an explanation with a source or remove it. "Lyrically, the song is metaphorical." → WP:OR, also short and awkward to read."Also Doug Rule of Metro Weekly felt." → " Also, Doug Rule of Metro Weekly, felt." Not done."emotional toned vocals" → " emotional vocals".Only one point to address in this section, the first point ^^. "she said:" → " saying" Done Tomica1111 ( talk) Actually, the entire first paragraph needs to be copy-edited, it just consists of very short one line sentences."Rihanna took control of the way she sounded on the record with confidence." → This doesn't make sense either."She said that she was at that stage of the song's development she, Timberlake and Timbaland were all very impressed and loved the song." → Doesn't make sense to read.Not done I still don't like the wording of the Timberlake having the lyrics in his head line, as well as the previous line about Timbaland creating the beat. "Timberlake wrote the song's lyrics in his head and not on paper." → Re-write, doesn't make sense saying he wrote it in his head.Only the one source is used at the end of the paragraph, use it at the end of each sentence otherwise it will look like the first few sentences are WP:OR, when they aren't.""Rehab" came about after Rihanna was following Timbaland on his tour with Justin Timberlake in the United States in 2007." → What do you mean by 'following Timbland on his tour'?.Done Tomica1111 ( talk) Section Done Calvin 'Shot' is indicative of the past tense, therefore no need for 'was'. "and it was shot outside" → " and shot".In the United States it reached number eighteen on the Billboard Hot 100." → " while reaching number sixteen on the UK Singles Chart, as well as number eighteen on the US Billboard Hot 100." "while reaching number sixteen on the UK Singles Chart.
You've spelt "instrumental" as "nstrumental" at the end of the first paragraph. "and then worldwide accompanied by an instrumental version of the song as its B-side." → Don't like the wording here either."It was physically released as a single." → " It was released as a physical single."."premiered a fifty second shorter single version" → Don't like the wording."The track was produced by Timbaland and co-produced by Hannon Lane" → " The track was co-produced by Timbaland and Hannon Lane"."released as the final eight single" → " released as the eighth and final single".The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
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